Persuasive+writing

We have been learning about persuasive writing this is my first copy of persuasive writing. **__ PSP’s are better than Nintendo Ds __** You have been saving your money for around two years and you have been doing every job you can think of around the house and you only get paid 2 dollars at the highest even for washing the car. You finally got the money so you could get a portable gaming console but you don’t know which one to pick out of a Nintendo Ds and a psp and you need to make the right decision other wise you will be stuck for the rest of your life knowing you got the wrong one. I have a psp at home and I know they are a lot better than Nintendo’s for some of the following reasons Most psp games are a little bit cheaper so you would be able to get more psp games than Nintendo games. Nintendo games are also very small so it would be easier to lose them unlike the psp games also a psp can hold more data so the games will be longer and tack you more time to complete the game and you will be trying to complete the game than trying to get money to buy another Nintendo game. The psp games can be saved more times than the Nintendo games. After I have talked about the psp games being better than the Nintendo’s games you must think the psp games are much better. The psp has a lot more options than the Nintendo like you can watch movies on the psp, go on the internet and listing to music. On the Nintendo the graphics are know where near the graphics as the psp this is a big reason why more people have psp’s over Nintendo’s. The psp is easer to take some where in a case than a Nintendo in a case because the Nintendo is bigger and most cases would not have a something to hook to your belt or your pants unlike the psp. The psp has louder speakers so if you a deaf in one ear or a little bit deaf you can hear it better than the Nintendo and if you like to listen to louder music you could do that on the psp better. The psp can store a lot of music if your memory card is 1 GB or more the Nintendo has no music Know you must be persuaded to get the psp over the Nintendo. **__The End
 * __Persuasive writing__**

Reflection:__** In the persuasive writing I think i have supported my idea that psp are better than Nintendo Ds

1.Use more techinical details. 2. Use more persuasive words 3. Make it longer
 * __Goals:__**

secound piece of persuasive writing.
 * __Persuasive writing__**

Last year I enjoyed the ski trip and I would like to go again to teach me how to ski so I can be better than what I was the last time I went skiing and would like to refresh my memory. Last year we had a lot of fun and this year it should be better. I will come back knowing how to ski and you will only have to pay a very small price of about $150. As you may already know we loved the ski trip we especially loved the skiing we also liked every other thing that we did and if you let us go to the ski trip again we can have an excellent learning experience and also have a lot of fun at the same time and be able to achieve our goal which is relating to others. We will also learn a lot of skills while planning the ski trip including skiing and a range of other skills. Last year we stayed at top ten it was very nice there and we played rugby every day on the bouncy pillow it was very fun as it was also they had very clean and good facilities. There was also a pool and a TV in every cabin which had sky and was crystal clear. Overall the accommodation was excellent and we would want to stay there again but we need you to supply us with the money to go first. The ski trip is a very worth while experience and we need to concur our challenges and step up to opportunities meet all the standards we will need to be mature if we want to relate to others. Over all the ski trip is going to be a such a good experience and opportunity to all of us and we need you to let us go. Nick van doodewaard
 * __ Dear Mum and Dad __**
 * __ Yours Sincerely __**

I think my ski trip letter was very persuasive i like how i sorted my things i was talking about in paragraphs.
 * __Reflection__**

Well done Nick
 * __Parents reflection:__**
 * A few more technical details on the differences between a PSP and a Nintendo would have been better so you can make a more informed choice.**
 * The story line of the ski trip is good with plenty of reasons why you enjoyed the trip.**

Have more persuasive text.
 * __Goal:__**

**__ School should not change to 10am __** Have you ever thought of or the bad things that could happen if school started at 10am. I will be talking to you about if school started at 10am we would have to change all our routines on what we do in the morning, We would miss a lot more hours of school in a year sure you could change school to 4 that would muck up all the hobbies you have and you will have less time to do sports as it will get dark quickly and how teachers will get paid less and quit there jobs then there would be no teachers to teach us. In the morning I know my sister has plans if I am in the bath room after 7.30 she will get mad because she won’t be ready in time for school because she has to walk the dog every morning she also wakes up very early to walk him and everything she does in the morning. If you have plans like these as well it will also annoy you and there a lot more people that will have the same problem as you it will lead to a major disaster. If we changed school to 10am we would miss a lot more hours of school and year sure we could prevent that by finishing school at four if we did that all of our sports would have to change then the after school sports would start at four and then finish at about five maybe five thirty some people would eat dinner at that time then they would have to either go to bed later and loss one hour to one hour and a half of sleep then the next day you will still be tired then you will go to school and you will be grumpy or you might fall asleep while you are doing stuff in the class you will ended up getting in trouble or even more serous some how getting a detention or going to the principle because you will being smart or not doing your work because your grumpy. If you normally do two sports a day now you will not be allowed to do two sports because you will have no time then you will miss out on one sport and then you will have to decide which one to quit. If school changed to 10am the teachers would work less and would get paid less. Since this would happen most of the teachers would try to get another job so they could get the same money as what they were earning before or more. Since the teachers have left the school there will be know one to teach us or we would have to be more people in a class then we would learn less and later on in life we would not have the skills to do jobs you could even end up being homeless. I have talked about morning plans, sports after school, hours of school missed and teachers getting paid less I know this has defiantly persuading ever one around New Zealand that school should not change to 10 am that’s why I think and you should think that school should not change to 10 am. **__ The End __** **__By Nick
 * __Third peice of persuasive writing__**

Reflection__** I liked how I put my ideas in paragraphs and had lots of persuading ideas.


 * __Parents reflection__**